Photo: Laura Purdie Salas
Wake up your poetry brains with 15 Words or Less (guidelines here)!
Here’s a pic I snapped in Vegas last spring. It makes me think of:
1)?a’deck of cards
2)?gila monsters and how their bacteria-laden saliva is what kills their prey
3) standup paddleboarding
And here’s my?first draft:
Conqueror
I?rule over
?? land
?? man
?? beast
Next,
the skies
must’sink
low before
Me
–Laura Purdie Salas, all rights reserved
Now it’s your turn! Have fun and stick to 15 WORDS OR LESS!??(Title doesn’t count toward word count:>)?
86 Responses
Wow, Laura! What a powerful poem- makes me think of pride before a fall!
NEVER ENDING…
Dragon defeater-
must be a repeater:
Another and his brother
and then their mean mother!
I like the rhyming, and your response makes me think of a movie about the lizard wars.
Yup, this guy’s pretty convinced he is all that! A dragon-slayer’s work is never done!
Wow, Laura! What a powerful poem- makes me think of pride before a fall!
NEVER ENDING…
Dragon defeater-
must be a repeater:
Another and his brother
and then their mean mother!
I like the rhyming, and your response makes me think of a movie about the lizard wars.
Yup, this guy’s pretty convinced he is all that! A dragon-slayer’s work is never done!
Knight
What shape
Cookie-cutter
Shaped your world
Clubs- hearts- spades
folding on a ace
Laura I like your poem I went with your card idea
Laura did you notice the the cloud in your pic looks like a blue wail 🙂
Hehe–nope, not until you just pointed that out! See, I took ocean pics in the desert that is Las Vegas!
I saw the shape, too, but differently. Love the card angle.
I love this odd idea of a cookie-cutter shaped world.
Knight
What shape
Cookie-cutter
Shaped your world
Clubs- hearts- spades
folding on a ace
Laura I like your poem I went with your card idea
Laura did you notice the the cloud in your pic looks like a blue wail 🙂
Hehe–nope, not until you just pointed that out! See, I took ocean pics in the desert that is Las Vegas!
I saw the shape, too, but differently. Love the card angle.
I love this odd idea of a cookie-cutter shaped world.
Definitely an interesting statue, man over beast? I like that you included the sky that seemed below him.
At heaven?s keyhole,
my journey ends.
Called to lay down my armor,
to make amends.
Linda Baie ? All Rights Reserved
I love the first line
But this short of makes me fill sad I just lost my mom last month to cancer
I’m sorry, Jessica. I was thinking of a soldier more than anyone else.
I saw a keyhole, too, Linda. I like heaven’s “keyhole”.
Oh, heaven’s keyhole! I want to listen at the door:>) Lovely.
Definitely an interesting statue, man over beast? I like that you included the sky that seemed below him.
At heaven?s keyhole,
my journey ends.
Called to lay down my armor,
to make amends.
Linda Baie ? All Rights Reserved
I love the first line
But this short of makes me fill sad I just lost my mom last month to cancer
I’m sorry, Jessica. I was thinking of a soldier more than anyone else.
I saw a keyhole, too, Linda. I like heaven’s “keyhole”.
Oh, heaven’s keyhole! I want to listen at the door:>) Lovely.
High and mighty,
I tower over all
with just one thought:
how do I get this guy
off my back?
I like the point of view…
I love hearing the voice of the lizard/dragon. Nice pun:>)
High and mighty,
I tower over all
with just one thought:
how do I get this guy
off my back?
I like the point of view…
I love hearing the voice of the lizard/dragon. Nice pun:>)
Trapped
I watch
My knight and his dragon
Face my demons for me
Ah, the voice behind the cell! Nice take.
Like Donna, great to imagine someone else there!
Ah, the princess speaks! Nice–I like the voice.
Trapped
I watch
My knight and his dragon
Face my demons for me
Ah, the voice behind the cell! Nice take.
Like Donna, great to imagine someone else there!
Ah, the princess speaks! Nice–I like the voice.
“Like” and Share
They pooh-pooh
Facebook, but I
revel in ducklings,
kittens, alligator
wrestling, and
connections made.
Diane Mayr, all rights reserved
A different look at this man, Diane. Connecting to our lives helps me imagine something altogether different.
“revel in ducklings” — love that line!
“Like” and Share
They pooh-pooh
Facebook, but I
revel in ducklings,
kittens, alligator
wrestling, and
connections made.
Diane Mayr, all rights reserved
A different look at this man, Diane. Connecting to our lives helps me imagine something altogether different.
“revel in ducklings” — love that line!
Statue
I stand proud,
man made of stone.
Can?t cry out loud,
want to go home.
?Kate Coombs
Stuck he is. I always think this of mannequins, too. Great idea.
I love how you evoke sympathy, or at least empathy, here. We have all been in this position before…
Statue
I stand proud,
man made of stone.
Can?t cry out loud,
want to go home.
?Kate Coombs
Stuck he is. I always think this of mannequins, too. Great idea.
I love how you evoke sympathy, or at least empathy, here. We have all been in this position before…
Sea in the sky
Foe at my feet
The keyhole where fact
And fantasy meets
I saw the whale, too.
Take off the s.… Auto-correct nightmare!
Sea in the sky
Foe at my feet
The keyhole where fact
And fantasy meet.
Love your idea of the entry, Donna, & the rhythm, too!
Ooo, I ADORE the keyhole metaphor — it’s wonderful!
Sea in the sky
Foe at my feet
The keyhole where fact
And fantasy meets
I saw the whale, too.
Take off the s.… Auto-correct nightmare!
Sea in the sky
Foe at my feet
The keyhole where fact
And fantasy meet.
Love your idea of the entry, Donna, & the rhythm, too!
Ooo, I ADORE the keyhole metaphor — it’s wonderful!
Thoughts from a Ruler’s Reptile
Can’t move.
Must stay still.
But I hurt,
feeling ill.
Achoo!
Oops!
What a spill!
Oh, no, the “after” is great. Love those short phrases!
Hehe–a ruler brought down by a sneeze!
Thoughts from a Ruler’s Reptile
Can’t move.
Must stay still.
But I hurt,
feeling ill.
Achoo!
Oops!
What a spill!
Oh, no, the “after” is great. Love those short phrases!
Hehe–a ruler brought down by a sneeze!
Enlightenment
Sitting Buddha
arms akimbo
receives with grace
the gift of gratitude
from his
adherent.
Laura, I love the confidence and lack of intimidation in your verse. I needed that today. No disrespect intended with the Buddha’s pointed head.
Love that you saw a buddha in that outline! Terrific.
Thanks, Martha. My favorite line is “arms akimbo” (who could not love that word!) and the last word in your poem. And all the g sounds.
Enlightenment
Sitting Buddha
arms akimbo
receives with grace
the gift of gratitude
from his
adherent.
Laura, I love the confidence and lack of intimidation in your verse. I needed that today. No disrespect intended with the Buddha’s pointed head.
Love that you saw a buddha in that outline! Terrific.
Thanks, Martha. My favorite line is “arms akimbo” (who could not love that word!) and the last word in your poem. And all the g sounds.
Silly cry of a knight
Sky so high
Blue as oceans tied
dragon-fly
save a silver wail
Silver stars silver sky
Blue as ocean’s tide is lovely–not just the ocean as a whole, but specifically the tide coming in. Such a nice detail.
Silly cry of a knight
Sky so high
Blue as oceans tied
dragon-fly
save a silver wail
Silver stars silver sky
Blue as ocean’s tide is lovely–not just the ocean as a whole, but specifically the tide coming in. Such a nice detail.
Through the Keyhole
I gawk at beasts and burdens,
laughter, light–
to risk the world
or retreat?
To be of the world or not–what a brisk, light poem to encapsulate that question!
Through the Keyhole
I gawk at beasts and burdens,
laughter, light–
to risk the world
or retreat?
To be of the world or not–what a brisk, light poem to encapsulate that question!
What a fun image! So much to explore in it. The confident pose of the hunter/warrior got me thinking a bit about the dangers of hubris. Here’s what I wrote:
Proud of his spear,
he stands upon a lizard
and forgets to look back.
That pride is exactly what inspired my poem, too–I love that he’s on the back of the lizard and forgets to look back. Even though you only use the word “back” one time, I hear it twice.
What a fun image! So much to explore in it. The confident pose of the hunter/warrior got me thinking a bit about the dangers of hubris. Here’s what I wrote:
Proud of his spear,
he stands upon a lizard
and forgets to look back.
That pride is exactly what inspired my poem, too–I love that he’s on the back of the lizard and forgets to look back. Even though you only use the word “back” one time, I hear it twice.
* It’s 16 words but I still like it. 🙂 *
BIG BROTHER?S BIG TALK
I stand tall
Above you
All as king.
What?s that Mom?
I didn?t say a thing.
© Charles Waters 2014 all rights reserved.
* It’s 16 words but I still like it. 🙂 *
BIG BROTHER?S BIG TALK
I stand tall
Above you
All as king.
What?s that Mom?
I didn?t say a thing.
© Charles Waters 2014 all rights reserved.